[1,068] Color of Avari - Chapter 2: Let Them Burn

Hello everybody. I was told to trim my word count if I wanted it posted so this one's a good bit shorter. I took a smaller piece from chapter 2: Let Them Burn of my book Color of Avari. It involves a big fight sequence with POV shifts. I try to make them clear by anchoring. It adds a horror-like element and makes it more cinematic imo. I want honest feedback on if you think it works or if it's too confusing. If you have any other opinions, I'd appreciate any feedback. If you'd like to read more, the link to my prologue and first two chapters is in my profile.

Google Doc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YDDAPb3IGD8jUcU7Ga8CX8QSXvF8VL5pSywwP5L09WY/edit?usp=drivesdk

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