[1317] Sweet Ecstasy

Content warning: graphic violence in sexual nature, dark themes, psychological manipulation

this is my first submission, just the first chapter, its been a passion project since some stuff happened irl. right now im not so keen on how to flow between scenes i dont want to have a like *walks down the street to Y* as well i struggle with punctuation alot. like. ALOT. most of my time is spent trying to make it coherent, im getting better but I still think I lack weight in certain areas theres probably things im not using etc especially with pauses.
I think the opening scene is pretty okay but might need a little more grounding in the world? i want it to be more character driven rather than world driven so thats my reason for focusing on the brutality, and building the world through character actions.

Sweet Ecstasy

Hope you enjoy,