[2276] Opening chapter of literary fiction comedy/drama - "The Bomb Shelter"

Hi my mangs

This is the opening chapter of a literary fiction novel I've mostly written the first half of. Any feedback's helpful, but I've gotten such a strange variety of responses to it thus far, due to the fact that it's an odd duck, so anyone familiar with the style or tone I'm aiming for (think...My Year of Rest And Relaxation, Mary Gaitskill sort of stuff) would be useful to have their initial response. Is it too jumpy, in terms of setting, in the opening? Do I need to introduce the actual 'premise' (below) in a more substantiative way? Line edits are great too. Working title.

*Premise: "*Self absorbed and self-hating 30-something Aimee is living in an authoritarian dictatorship, but is more concerned that her only real friend is moving on to the next stage of her life and having a baby. Feeling her life now lacks any real meaning, she uses the excuse of a newly-elected dictator's command to build personal bomb shelters to trap and enslave a local boy she crushes on."

Link to chapter - you can comment