[2234] smile for the gram

hey guys, after thoroughly pissing off half the community with terrible critiques, i've finally gathered the courage to be eviscerated myself by this community.

this is a for fun piece where i had two oc ideas in my head and decided to mash them together with an x-men derivative plot line. this is one of them and an intro to them.

i had a lot of fun writing it. this piece is as deep as pop songs. alexa, play soda pop from kpop demon hunters.

any and all critique welcomed. i enabled comments if you wanna comment there. just want to improve my writing a bit and challenge myself after years of just discord rps.

the title is tbd, workshopped, but i just needed something instead of tbd title lol. suggestions are welcomed

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-prUI_Vr5Lx5CCW5pazAfmWDhNwBVmZhG3ym63S-5_Y/edit?usp=sharing

hehe, now i get to excitedly cash out on my critiques.

[2167] pearl of the orient chapt 2

[1004] charmed

[120] smoke and ruin

[384] forgive me father

mods feel free to lmk if i need more