[1958] Carbon And Thorns

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This is the first chapter of a short novel i have been toying with, the goal being solely to improve my writing. I'm worried this chapter is too vague with regards to the plot. I'm also looking specifically for critique on my language devices.

Any critisiscm is very welcome, tell me you hate it, love it or could not care less if it existed.

Anyways thanks to any readers :)