Need Help: Initial Reader FanFic

Hello,

I am a 32/M Filipino who followed the manga from the start. I graduated with the degree in Psychology and certificates in body language reading & relationship counseling (though those certificates are already lapsed). I had 8 years of operational and strategic HR experience, which involved training and recruitment – which has helped me to fully hone my craft in psychology and people profiling. I am also working as a management consultant on weekends while starting with business partners our creative consultancy business, hence the busy schedule.

Last February, I was hit by a drunk motorcycle driver while buying bread on the sidewalk. I suffered Traumatic Brain Injury, specifically Post Traumatic Encephalopathy. I have suffered selective amnesia, which had gotten a bit worse after reinjuring it two weeks ago while in the bathroom. I am currently on my 6th month of therapy, and my neurologist told me to go back to my hobby, which is writing and singing.

Now, because of my frustration as to how I followed this manga, which in my surprise is one of the things I had not forgotten fully (though some details I forgot), I decided to take it on myself and write a fanfiction. Through using a combination of ChatGPT and Gemini and my own writing skills, as my Neurologist told me I cannot strain my mind too much, I was able to write a 64-chapter 300+ volume 1 novel focusing on Kazuya’s redemption arc. The story took me to write new characters such as new love interest, supporting characters, antagonists. I also try to slowly resolve some plot holes.

I did some character breakdown of Kazuya and Chizuru prior writing the story, and have written a character that matches both so that it will make the story compelling. I also have infused some of my wife’s personality in the character, which made it special for me, since she has some qualities that Chizuru is lacking.

Now I hope to get some feedback, as you know, AI is a bit cranky and that even if I read it 10x already, a pair of other eyes can give me quality feedback to select what can be improved further. Based on my checklist, I had achieved the goals I have in mind, while maintaining the characters’ base personality while slowly improving it through plot and supporting characters.

I hope you can help me. What I need are those with knowledge of Japanese and German Culture, as the new characters are of German Descent. I also need a super fan of Kazuya, Chizuru and Mami as I also have a plan for a Mami Redemption Arc to close her story completely. I also think it would be helpful if I get a perspective from women that read the manga since my wife can’t answer me since she doesn’t like the Rent a GF story, All in all, I guess 5 women and 5 men aside from the original 2 redditors who are now starting to read would help.

As for Ruka, her story already progresses here. I also hope to make new friends here as I am an introvert and only have four friends in my lifetime haha!

The novel started after Chapter 382. I also thank those 2 redditors that are starting to read it already and one had given feedback already on chapter one. I will consolidate feedback as I continue writing so that it will be easier to revise it one fell swoop.

As for character designs, the new love interest has already a peg and is AI generated, it would be helpful if someone can draw her, and also the glowed-up Kazuya, who also have a peg.

Just send me a DM. Let's all together explore possibilities as to how this story can progress in an alternate universe.

Thank you!