[593] Untitled ("I studied the photograph for two, three minutes")

Hi! Here's a new writing exercise I'm working on. The prompt for this exercise was to write a short story without using adjectives or adverbs. I quickly realized that determiners were necessary, and I did use some adjectives here and there. But I tried to do everything to avoid them as long as I could make a semi-coherent English sentence without them. I also tried to write something more down to earth and realistic this time instead of sci-fi stuff. I felt like I grew a lot as a writer with this exercise, and I'm curious to hear what people thing.

Please feel free to really critique it and don't worry about hurting my feelings with what you have to say. Give me your uncensored review.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yE90K_q29QeLS5S1HdUCBENopvX0TrXg/edit

Crit: [758] https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1m11wwh/758_the_ones_who_nodded/n3jfefu/