[2341] Ending. Chapter 1 fantasy story.

Hi. Here's the first chapter of a story I've been planning for some time.

Have at it. Strengths, weaknesses, pacing prose, etc. I'd appreciate any thoughts really.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12uTbVrtrsLXL-7sOaosRx5wuH5QEDXBHXLa0zRkuS7o/edit?usp=sharing

The following are just some notes about my intentions around this chapter, for those who have read it. I wanted it to be a slow and mostly mundane chapter to contrast with the coming story. I'm aware that this doesn't excuse boring or uninteresting writing nontheless. It is similar to certain books and tropes, which unfortunately I can do little about, because I think it is necesarry to build up later ideas.

Here is my critique
[2642] The Laurel and the Blade - Chapter 1 https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1mgzm3v/comment/n7hlyof/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button