[885] Left Alone (Working Title) - Short Story/Flash Fiction

Hi! Pretty much just finished a (sort of) first draft of this short story/flash fiction that I’ve been writing. The initial premise was ”The life of a man who wants to be left alone is turned upside down when he is left alone” but I don’t know if this would really match the final product.

I really need help with developing it more. I think I can predict what most of the critique is going to be, but I really need some concrete critique to work with. Also, this is pretty much the first real piece of fiction I’ve ever written, so keep that in mind, but don’t make the criticism nicer because of it. Be as harsh as possible.

Here's my critique: [839] Chapter One Of A Story Of A Grieving Family

Here's the story: Left Alone