[3058] Chapter 1: Ending. Fantasy story.

Hi. I posted this chapter a while back and have tweaked it based on the feedback quite a bit I believe.

I would appreciate any advice about anything really. Prose, pacing, character, plot/ interest would be good, but honestly any thoughts would be great.

(For some reason I can’t change the tag, sorry.) Thank you

Here’s the link.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/13ur9nt1YCcEKU3OpKODPlwrIMHZ8KOY6usYjhyvhcqM/edit?usp=drivesdk

For those done reading, one thing I’ll say is that this chapter thematically fits with certain ideas i will explore more later, and so the “twist” does have a purpose.

Critiques.

[2633] Madaha, The Blood Vow. https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/jvBug7NuvN

[885] Left Alone https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/nAExFPSFeQ