[2462] PROTOTIQUITY, Chapter One Part 1

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An epistolary sci fi horror novel about the first lunar colony, where researchers uncover a warning left by a civilization older than humanity. Severed from Earth by war, the colonists must not only grapple with the inconceivable and the unobtainable, but also with each other. Told through audio messages and electronic Journal entries, Dr. Gwendolyn Gwynne slowly unravels her sapphic longing as she realizes she may never see her family again, and the multi-disciplined engineer Janessa Sine takes any action she can to bring herself closer to understanding the secret history of the solar system.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1J6pLYB04rpaK_mjpdcN2Dl08n3MUetnNwgoYpG_nfw0/edit?usp=sharing

Any feedback is appreciated! Is it coherent and readable? Does anything break immersion right away?

I go back and forth on the dialogue/writing style; I feel like an audio recording would be more stream of consciousness, but I also feel like it would be terribly boring to read a book where all the dialogue is summarized, shortened, and paraphrased. I hope I struck a good balance.