[523] Prose draft

Any and all prose critiques are welcome. I am attempting to get a ss published and find it difficult judging my own prose.

If context is important, this is a story where our pov character wanders beyond the fence and into the trees where stuff happens. Not a ghost story though. Not sure if I'm setting up that it is a ghost story too much or if I need to move faster to actual setup and remove most of this setup.

Thank you!

Prose draft