[594] Untitled Beginning

Literally a v0 draft as I'm trying to work out what the characters feel like and exactly how the plot points are structured. I've even got notes to myself in there. Still trying to learn my prose style.

Immediate reactions, and general thoughts are appreciated. I'd also like to know what promises you feel this introduction is giving you about the kind of story it is.

Crit:
[1551] The fort

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