Indie song - lyric clip on YouTube, honest feedback?

I would love to know what you think of these lyrics. They occur to me at work, on the street or at home and I write them in my notepad... And then I use suno to give them a voice... It's not professional, but it's entertainment that I would like to share from the heart. I would like to know what mistakes I made or what would change...

Complete on YouTube - https://youtu.be/urYqTcT95Js?si=5UAK1bbozxsLwYjl

Do you think it can hit? Or do I jump into the river? 🥹