[1801] Ashborne

Hey! I have posted before, but my word count exceeded a little so I'm posting a smaller excerpt. These are the first chapters of my psychological dark fantasy that will go for submission after rework and I'm looking for general feedback, especially if the hook is good enough for a literary agent. Thanks in advance!

Story https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uy4RZJVAqiR0ebT2efuAcFhVhhF9n17rkZd1vZzEYeU/edit?usp=drivesdk

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