[1821] Chapter 1: Marked by Fire

This is the first chapter of my novel:

Prose type: very close third-person, literary, poetic.

Warning

Some paragraphs are loaded with metaphors and similes, which can be confusing.

My motive for my first chapter is to be mysterious.

Genre: Literary Fantasy

I'm terrible at flow… That’s my main goal for the question.

Is my flow insufficient?

But any critique would be excellent, though I could tell if a critique is being dismissive or not.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/19Tv2ZSUlMAcOHg2gfLEkG3JIE4C3o7TR5PHR0ezqbfY/edit?usp=drivesdk

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[1801] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/fVkiL7VVp4 https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/olajs9abcd [550]

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/CKc4fecO9s [1260] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/FbX8SHao56