Are repeated verses working?

:flair-need-feedback: Feedback Request

https://youtu.be/NPbpJPOQ6zQ?si=xCLjk3tz191LCjXA

I wrote a song about Gaza, and it has one verse repeated twice. I think the lyrics are good, and I decided to repeat them twice and gauge the effect. Does it work in strengthening their impact and emphasis, or just does it just sound boring and lazy? Very open to feedback. Thanks.

For the draft video linked, I put the lyrics in a Star Wars scroll. It looks ridiculous. But seemed to make it readable. Here they are here:

go pound sand
while you hide i'll tan
Reapers hunt the ruins we got plenty cash in hand
Im feeling generous search the rubble for survivors just make sure
Get all your family's dead bodies out of my white concrete before it cures

get off my beach, go pound sand
tanks are warming up their engines coughing black smoke like dragons
The ground plan clears the way for beach side casino floor plans
All your screaming showed the drones your exposed location my man

Posted Nov 1, 2025, 7:55 PM UTC

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