"A Special Providence" (slightly more practiced early cell phone demo) [Emotional Rock and Roll, Psychedelic Folk, Shoegaze]

Okay, so, sorry to create and delete a thread only to make another with the exact same song, but here it is!

The leaves turn and fall through the golden amber/as I get high and draw smoke to my chamber/you tilt your throat towards the sky and sing an old standard/like a nervous child would "Away in a Manger"/I wince while I smile and say that I gave you/my life for a while, but now I just feign your leading role

We were once young and full of such great wonder/dauntlessly drawn to dangerous pleasures/and faultlessly fawning o'er each other/so distantly lost and blissfully conquered/by slow-motion gazing machines in our eyes/capturing icons we'd played before the great fire

When the time comes to call in all our favors/I'll write on my wall a small manifesto/and call upon all who'd fight just to save yet/another world in a small city garden/and when the tanks roll down the lane where we stand/I'll hold out as long it takes for you to escape this end

I have built what I can of your world/become a man of some worth/helped you find solace in song/and laid out the canvas you spill your paint on/but I can't give my life to a dream/we don't share or live in, you see/I am not the other you seek/I am as alone as you are with me

I'm not entirely satisfied with the closing chorus and can't tell if it's just the last line or more or less the entire thing. I can't stand writing choruses, to be honest. You've got to be so in the meter and on key, neither of which are my strong suits.

It's eventually going to have layered electric rhythm guitar. I'm thinking about timing out a vintage voiced fuzz with some phaser and reverb throughout and layering at least two other fuzzes with different pedalboard setups for the bridge as well as bringing about treble flipped fuzz for the closing chorus. You might think that having four rhythm tracks with four different fuzz pedals, among other effects and setups, is excessive, but I think that it'll sound good, and, so, am not really interested in your opinion on that. There's also going to be mandolin accompaniment and electric lead during the first bridge and from the second bridge to the end of the song.

It'd be nice to have some faux-classical Velvet Underground-style drumming, but I have not the instruments for that. It'd also be nice to have vocal harmonies, which I have not the skill for. It'd also be nice to have some mellotron or harmonium, which I obviously also don't have, since all of my songs would sound better with that kind of drone. I would also like to hear some viola or cello on it, but, what wouldn't sound better with viola or cello?

If you're interested in playing any of those parts for me for free, though, do hmu.

Assuming that I won't find any of that, it'll probably just be acoustic guitar, layered electric rhythm, electric lead, and mandolin, which I think will sound cool anyways.

I'd like to start practicing the song so that I can passably sing it on a recording, and, so, let me know if I should change anything before it gets locked in place.

Any thoughts, commentary, feedback, or whatever else is also welcome!