Critique help to grow and monetize

Could you please help critique my blog/ blog post?

https://wintasolstice.com/blog/slow-travel-in-korea-while-working-remotely/

I want to get better and eventually monetize by a book or affiliate marketing.

Niche ideas: Mindful remote worker traveller Maybe add some posts on projects I'm working on (music, crafting, art)

I heard of discords that help critique blogs.. would love some recs!