Do you think , content this way can work ??

I have a old laptop that sucks can't even edit simple video. So after lot of thinking come out this way. My friend told me don't do this way it's sucks look like your teaching. What do you think

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lMTcY8mC7xakwINZHeil6B-0wBAoNEPY/view?usp=drivesdk