[1964] Black Cloud

Chapter 1 of an apocalyptic horror.

Experimenting with a fast paced, unreliable voice but I’ve read it far too many times to tell if it actually works on any level. Would appreciate any and all feedback.

Black Cloud: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-TnNyKYZClupVM6KjEF1uvztgOFASD3qhdo1cQwg3L4/edit?usp=drivesdk

Critique: [3619]