[868] Through the Quietglow

Genre: YA Dark Fantasy / Urban Horror

This is an 868-word prologue from a larger novel project.

I am NOT looking for line edits or copyediting.

I am looking for reader reactions only:

– clarity

– tone

– pacing

– emotional impact

– confusion or intrigue as a first-time reader

Thank you

[868] Prologue Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/10CWxGscM8rkJWIxBKC8EPBFfQ9H9Z7grrciuL0WJ6cI/edit?usp=drivesdk

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