[1216] A Sunny Day in the Park

Hey everyone.

This is my first time posting a story here. I've been a long time lurker. I don't really have anyone to get feedback from about my writing, so I am looking forward to hearing what people think about my short story A Sunny Day in the Park. I don't have anything special that I want the critiques to be focused on. I would just be interested to hear everyone's general impression of my story. I would also like to hear any feedback on what I could do to get better.

Here is my short story: A Sunny Day in the Park

Here is my critique: [1351] Izzy - Chapter 7