The Motel

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When I met you, you lived in a motel

With blankets that blocked the light from coming in through the window

A black time zone interrupted only by the red glow of that one lamp on the floor;

A red that lights your face just enough

And traces the edge of your back

When you opened the door in the late afternoons

I was greeted by blackness but it felt like the sun

And we would lose hours, and days

Like they do in space

Where it all just feels like a few minutes

But today,

gravity pulls a little bit harder

And I remember laying in that motel bed,

Watching you, all in red

And thinking you were the most beautiful thing I’d ever seen

And that it felt like freedom

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Posted Jan 27, 2026, 2:55 AM UTC

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