My Father

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Context (tit could means a small bird)

Weary eyes, heavy breaths

Small room, fatigued guests

Dancing to pretend, laughing till the

End.

The Host needs to be pleased or else

The weary eyes will take its last

breath.

The Host is a demanding Bird on its nest.

Killing birds from its own bones and flesh.

The little bird doesn’t wanna see the

Grotesque.

So it closes its eyes of young bliss.

The Host-Bird gets insulted by the little tit.

He doesn’t do anything, but leaves him alone.

Spread its wings-

and left the small half-finished nest to the cold.

The guests-

kept on dancing…

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Posted Feb 7, 2026, 11:05 PM UTC

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