My former intern supervisor gave me an old contact of theirs and suggested I reach out to them for work. Is this email too blunt or long?

Dear Director (of local university program),

I hope you’re well. My name is thelastharebender, and I was encouraged to reach out to you by Former Intern Supervisor from Suffolk Health Department. I recently completed my DrPH and have been working in health services research and program coordination. Former Intern Supervisor thought it would be valuable for me to connect with you given your work as a Program Manager and your role in academia.

I am looking to break into the industry but it's a bit precarious at the moment. I was hoping I could chat with you about employment opportunities. I understand you're busy if that is not possible.

Thank you for your time, and I look forward to connecting.

Best,

Thelastharebender

TIA!