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mkdun

Serviceberries in June

Feedback Please

It’s been a season since

I last saw you outside

my window. Less half a leg

and a limp gait, still approaching

me forthright. A handful of shadbush

berries stain my warm palm

as I lean forward in offering, eager

to amend for an unkind world.

Leaves crunch and twigs break

beneath my feet, slight hesitation

with each step and snap

of a branch. Have I gone too far,

too fast? Sustained verbal eye

contact with your white trimmed

face, or the best I could do

to be less of a thinking thing.

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Posted Feb 16, 2026, 5:47 AM UTC

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