[297] First page of a dark fantasy story

I mainly want to know if this first page is any good and if people are interested enough that they would continue reading, but any feedback is welcome.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/17XaIs6L_uD2cADwD9dtF5_htyiI8mIxw3gniDWhyqZ0/edit?usp=sharing

Critiques:

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[750] Ducks