(F) My Death Korps of Krieg (Again) short story

F. Perhaps I was the only one who read the Siege of Vraks books and felt baffled by how idiotic and reductive the books were about the Death Korps of Krieg, but I've forced myself to cleanse my palate by writing my own military sci-fi, and this one is about some Kriegsmen 'rescuing' a young girl from a warzone.

All feedback welcome! I'm still learning, so critique of my writing style is good (If you think it reads crap, let me know)

Hope a few of you like military fiction and the Imperial Guard. Chaos Marines get some mileage here too, so hopefully no one thinks I did them a disservice (Did my best to avoid plot armour for the Krieg, no doubt they approve)

Link:
https://archiveofourown.org/works/80964181