Paliye biye, need suggestions

Amar nijer bon kal bikele bari theke paliye giye biye kore niyeche. Tarpor sondhay phone kore sob bollo je biye hoye geche. Amra sobai mene niyechi, tarpor oke jigges korchi cheletar bari kothay jate man somman nosto na kore bhalo kore biye diye debo oi cheletar sathei. Kintu kichutei bolche na ora kothay ache. Bolche 2-4 din pore sob khule bolbe.Bujhte parchi barir ase pase kothao ache.

Ei obosthay amader ki kora uchit? Wait kora uchit naki thana te jawa uchit?