[1913] Heat Below - Chapter 1

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Hi Destructive Readers,

I'm looking for feedback on the first chapter of my WIP. Earlier drafts had a short prologue that preceded this, but I’m leaning towards cutting it. I've reworked this Chapter 1 in the hopes that it can stand alone.

All levels of feedback are welcome, but I'm mostly wondering if it’s enough to keep you reading. Why or why not. Input on pacing and prose (or anything) would be great too.

In terms of genre, I'm calling this Adult Gothic Fantasy. 

Thank you!