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AtypicalFaker

Exclution

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The tunnel opens with a mouth of glass.
A hush like moth-wings settles on my skin.
Their voices toll like bells beneath the sea.
I move through corridors of rust and hush.
A coal of anger smolders under bone.

Between the lamp-lit rooms and blue-lit screens,
I sit within a circle made of glass.
Their laughter passes like a distant train.
I learn the art of staying out of reach.
My life runs parallel, a quiet map.

Friday is shore; I taste its thin, brief light.
But Sunday folds me into iron tide.
The school becomes a ship with hollow oars.
Exclusion salts the mouth and dries the tongue.
I count the teeth of days until I'm home.

i wrote this to try and express the exclution

my comments
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1s0i12n/all_i_wanted_was_you/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1s0t075/bury_me_deeper_i_still_can_taste_the_earth/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button

Posted Mar 22, 2026, 6:32 PM UTC

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