[4137] A Stained-Glass Cocoon (Horor/New Weird)

I've been working on this one for a while, any feedback would be appreciated.

With that said I do have a few specific questions you can hopefully answer:

• Did the scene breaks and time jumps confuse you?
• Does the pacing feel effective or does it drag in places?
• Are the characters believable within the context of the story?
• Did you connect emotionally with Adam and or Amber, if not why?
• Does the story feel cohesive despite the nonlinear scenes?
• What did you think the story was about?
• What did you think of Adam by the end of the story?

Just to be safe I also wanted to make sure I warned anyone going into this story, it touches on some pretty dark psychology and there are allusions to self-harm. Also there's a ton of body horror.

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A Stained-Glass Cocoon