[2531] Progenitor Crisis Chapter 1 (Sci-fi)

First post, and hoping for positively scathing critique, for I am a hobbyist and will have fun writing no matter what, but hey, no harm in improving. This is a Sci-fi story about Superhumans that live under a cartel-owned planet. Here's a few things I'd like to know:

Does it feel like YA? If so, why? (I would rather not have it feel like YA)

Would you read more?

What really sucks?

Thanks!

I have a list of critiques I've done here. I am still improving my critiques so here's multiple in case one or multiple are not considered high-quality (would suck to be considered leeching, but hey, learning is learning):

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/et61uhmJ0L

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/Rw3ivZCArp

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/cTuzH7Ik9L

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/3cjVthQoX6

link to chapter 1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sA8ENjaWuB8tQ_zHtkgOSwaC16SNfSQy3cKy35R-184/edit?usp=drivesdk