Need feedback on my lyrics
im writing a song and i wanted feedback on the lyrics they go like
oh mummy mummy i am so spiffing
oh mummy mummy i feel a triffing
oh lovely porridge straight to my belly
oh rancid milk so bad so smelly
oh joyous day when there are berries
berries of blue and pink and cherry
berries that sparkle and glimmer with glee
berries for my porridge that i eat hastily
when berries are gone i sing a sad song
but not right now not for so long
my berries are here so i sing happily
berries for me and for mummy
Posted Apr 4, 2026, 1:26 PM UTC
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