[QCrit] Adult Satire / BURGER WARS / 58k

Dear [Agent Name],

I am seeking representation for Burger Wars, a British absurdist dystopian satire complete at 58,000 words.

Marcus Thorne wakes up in an abandoned fast-food restaurant with no idea how long he's been frozen. The answer is twenty years; this is long enough for England to have collapsed into a corporate war between Ron's Burgers and General's Chicken, long enough for everyone he loved to have moved on, and long enough for the girl he was going to propose to to have become the country's most feared military commander.

Drafted into Ron's beef army and fed compliance chemicals with every meal, Marcus discovers the war is a production line: the meat is people, the drones harvest the dead, and the corporation’s profit from both sides. When his friend Trevor sacrifices himself to broadcast the truth across every screen in England, Marcus becomes a symbol of resistance. He frees one farm. Fifty more remain operational. The war is far from over.

Burger Wars is deliberately lean; it's fast food. The story moves at the speed of a drive-thru line because the world Marcus wakes up in doesn't slow down for anyone. It will appeal to readers of The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy, Animal Farm, and John Dies at the End.

I am a UK-based writer working under the pen name S.R. Moore. While Burger Wars is a standalone novel, I have outlined additional stories set in this world.

Yours sincerely,
S.R. Moore

Questions:

- Does the hook work?

- Are my comps too dated?

- Is the "deliberately lean; it's fast food" line too cute?