[1386] Inventory Error Chapter 1 (part 2/2)

My critiques: [1421] The Boiler That Came to Life

Part 1 (already posted previously)

Part 2 (What I'm asking for feedback on)

Both parts together if you're a freak like that

This is the last third of the first chapter of my short story. I mostly wanted feedback on the first two things.

1. Was the dialogue with Nadia at the end good at all? Was it cringe? Was it believable?

2. Did the psych horror elements hit or was it just kinda eh.

3. Would you be intrigued to see where this goes or did it lose you compared to the first half.

4. Any other feedback.

Thanks again. Looking forward to getting harassed in the comments like last time.