[704] The first three pages of my novel

Hello everyone,

I'm looking for feedback regarding:

1. Readability

2. Clarity of the setting

3. How compelling is the narrative

4. (If you are feeling generous) spelling, grammar, and style

Here's the link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1UD3hLGUoHeQId5bmWqAzhyj_-3Yq4Hz8_Lte6flv7MU/edit?usp=sharing

Thanks in advance!

My critiques on this sub:

Critique 1, 794 words: https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1s3opvx/794_heat_below_prologue/ochd8nn/

Critique 2, 881 words: https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1sz04w3/881_doofus/oiyu1yj/