Something is different with my style and I can’t work out what

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I’m 10k words into a draft & fully panicking. I have this style where I’m writing very specific details about a scene — characters actions and reactions (like a hand digging into a shoulder pushing someone to a car, a character turning and locking eyes). But I can’t seem just to write he got in the car and drove up the street. It’d be like ‘Bob flung open the side door and glued his blue jeans to the drivers seat. He planted his foot on the accelerator and flew up the road.’

What am I doing wrong here. It’s all in this style …. Like tracking the characters movements. It was fine for the first three chapters where I’d have some limited narration and just throw into a scene but as it’s gone on I’ve realised it’s not working when I have to establish setting and transition characters to new places. It’s almost like it’s all zoomed in on physical reactions… Help … I feel so jammed

Posted May 2, 2026, 1:59 PM UTC

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