Friendless dummy needs help reviewing the first few chapters of his book. (Litrpg)

HI! as the title says I am starting out as an author. I need some beta readers before i release my work on RR. Unfortunatly, I don't really have friends I trust to show my work to just yet. So I turn to you guys for help. We can even trade, like i read your chapters tell you what I think, while you do the same for me. And if you don't have the time, maybe you can recommend a place where i can find people that could help? Tnx! Dan has nothing—except his sister. With a face that won’t move, a stutter that betrays him, and a hyper senetive sense of smell, he’s spent his life being beaten down. But none of that matters. Not when Cece is hungry. Not when she’s sick. Not when she needs him. “Welcome, contestant. To the pitstop on your journey to eternal damnation. Strive to entertain, survial is optional,” Dan needs to survive 30 days. Meet a god. and make a wish. Because somewhere out there— His sister is waiting. here is the link any help would be greatly aappreciated.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fzoCEyLH8j17pRp3YT1eyaz-CvT1kP0C0HRDqsfonWE/edit?usp=sharing

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fzoCEyLH8j17pRp3YT1eyaz-CvT1kP0C0HRDqsfonWE/edit?usp=drivesdk