I wrote a poem. I want your opinion on it . What do you think?

.Girl, I've looked up so many ceilings

and gave to many greetings

Among all that I tried to find a

meaning.

Girl, I've seen so many bloodstains

and wondered: where are my pains?

I've drawn too many scars on my body

I lowkey startled believing I've

become too rusty ... to live.

I was a moon and I didn't

mind looking for the stars

Until I found you ...

In my darkness, as my sun has

left me

I've wondered if this world has

cursed me

with loneliness

But now is as bright as can be

Because you were there to help

me see ...

What do you all think? I'm willing to discuss context behind the poem .