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Hey y’all, looking for some advice on my writing, not plot or anything of that sort. Especially cause I haven’t written enough to introduce the plot lol 😆

Just wanna see if I’m going in the right direction.

For the start it reads as an industrial sci-fi

Going for more of a character driven story that through them the world is built. Subtle atmosphere and world building without shoving it down your throat.

There are some grammar errors and any advice on that front would be welcomed but is not a priority!

This is a rough draft btw

Thank you! Keep it brutally honest❤️

Link to story -

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1TKtcsMSbtZBjTnAhAzkirP\_tqscr0TJS/edit?usp=drivesdk&ouid=117431519081735516164&rtpof=true&sd=true

PS: mods I’ll make sure to get that review of another persons story done within 12 hours, just want to make sure I give it a high quality review (within my skill sets lol)