Personal statement advice

Hey Everyone !! Im currently finishing up my dental school personal statement and have been struggling with finalizing it. I've revised it multiple times and reached the point where I think I need fresh eyes on it. If anyone has a strong personal statement that was successful this cycle or in previous cycles, I'd really appreciate it if you could look over mine and give honest feedback. I'd especially appreciate comments on the overall story, flow, and whether my motivation for dentistry comes across clearly. Please PM me if you are able to.