[2134 words] Untitled Cyberpunk (Part 1)

Hey, looking for feedback on this cyberpunk story I've started writing, I don't have a lot of experience so would like to get an idea of the kind of level I'm currently at.

Specifically I would appreciate feedback primarily in these areas:

Dialogue- does my dialogue flow well, does it feel natural (in a cyberpunk world)

Characters- Specifically Angelo, and to some extent Kiara, do you get a strong sense of who they are?

Action- Lower priority, but it would be good to know if the action sequence was at least easy enough to follow, or if there are areas I could improve.

Finally, there may be one or two areas where I've wrote notes to myself in brackets, please ignore those.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRUlFKa8096v0eDWtmp6Psfbsfw6Ihyo44bfvdipqDiTS0WciDEdFKufZiq_mu6qBjSkbnd84U01fe_/pub

Critiques:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1ukn961/comment/ovc2wxy/?context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1ukr2im/comment/ovb403g/?context=3