[1122] Trouble in Pegor Ch.2

[1484] Crit

This is the second chapter of a Fantasy project I'm working on. Hoping to get some more feedback. Again don't mind the working title. Its just a placeholder til the story is more developed. Here is the post with the first chapter if you're interested:

Chapter 1 Post

Here are some questions I have for specific feedback:

-Did the opening atmosphere and romantic elements feel engaging, or did they slow the chapter down?

-Did you feel invested in Chui before the final scene?

-Did the reveal at the end feel earned and impactful, or did it feel like it came out of nowhere?

-Did the worldbuilding around Tille, the mine, Pegor, and the war feel natural or overwhelming?

-Were there any moments where the prose pulled you out of the scene?

-Does the Geg relationship feel convincing?

-Is the ending too abrupt?

Thanks for reading.

Trouble in Pegor Chapter 2