[1165] epilogue, literary fiction

two of my reviews: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/9E26iVicop
https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/xA1A4mwqVW

this is an epilogue to an unfinished novel I’ve been working on for some time, thats supposed to be a blend of literary fiction and political satire. without any background knowledge on the characters and events of the novel, I really want any pointers on style and tone.
The main things I want to know are whether the style/formality is appropriate for the setting (29 year old English man, 1967), what kind of relationship it seems like I’m trying to establish, and opinions on the prose in general.
Any critiques would be greatly appreciated!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/17Ns-5gkGNT1wiJfEgcEtx33lNtybQC48vBbLIdhcqo4/edit?usp=drivesdk