[1075] Salted Star Saga

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This is my first post here, so if I did something wrong, please let me know!

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I recently finished my first novella (finally)! I'm a relatively new writer, and I'm working on an episodic science fiction series told from my main character Fin's point of view.

I'm looking for some readers to go through my first chapter and give me some feedback. Would you keep reading after the first chapter? What works for you? What doesn't? Anything else you think I should know?

Thank you in advance to anyone who takes the time to read!