So, I just republished my old story. It currently has 10 chapters na. Gusto ko talaga makakuha ng feedback about it because I want to improve. Maybe you guys can try reading a few chapters and tell me what I'm doing wrong.

Here is the story blurb:

Adellaine Dianna "Adie" Verde lives an uninteresting life. Being raised in a wealthy household that puts reputation over everything built her to be an academic achiever and a filial daughter that every parent would be proud of.

As she grew up, winning became merely a routine. Praises and medals were to be expected, and everything was just... well...boring.

Except, maybe one thing.

Rafael Corbyn Ramirez is an anomaly to her picture-perfect world. The girl who rarely felt excitement would feel her heart pounding by the thought of seeing Mr. Second Place frustrated face again whenever she'd beat him. A relentless rival that stirs her emotions in ways she could never understand.

Could this fated rivalry turn into something more?

But even if it does, would it even matter?

When Adellaine Verde has already been betrothed to Rafael's older brother?

Title: Fated Rivalry

Writer: meteorite\_not\_meteor

link: [Fated Rivalry - Ploy - Wattpad](https://www.wattpad.com/story/408194697-fated-rivalry)

thanks:))

(screenshots are from the last chapter)

Looking for critiques!