[Title: Paradise] How can I improve my song?

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Making a mistake doesn't mean I didn't want you to stay

our meeting was fate

I've fallen into a dystopian age

this feels like horror

emotions going berserk, shaken to my core

never wanted you to go away

You'll always have a place in my soul

like a torch in a cave

lights dim, not completely faded

this me is what you created

you'll never understand, you're unphased

I know I shouldn't dwell on the past

though like a meteor you've made such an impact

I can't stop feeling it but I know if I don't let go

I'll never heal from this

Get out of my head

out of my memory

before I lose all of my sanity

You were my happiness

You were my light

so why aren't you mine

why aren't you mine

why you trying to steal my paradise

and I get chills when I think of all the moments

I feel it across my skin

I sob and sob until I pass out

all of the time just lost in the wind

I've become void of everything

ever since I lost my sunshine

you were the only thing keeping my mind at ease

I don't know how long

how long I can take this

miss your warm embraces

I'm tired and afraid

you took my heart away