Feedback for my Wicca/Pagan inspired magic system [science fantasy]

General Discussion

I'm currently writing my own take on Star Wars called 'Chaotic Elements', but there's one aspect I've been trying to nail down.

In Star Wars, the Force is inspired by many belief systems such as Buddhism and Taoism, but for my version of the Force which I've called the Divine, I've decided to pivot towards Wicca and other religious, spiritual and occult traditions.

I think I've got some of it finalized

Magical spells have a larger presence in my story than they have in Star Wars (not Harry Potter-like spells, before you ask)

The Divine doesn't necessarily judge people's morality as opposed to Star Wars where the dark side is considered to be a source of corruption.

There is an emphasis on lunar cycles being metaphors for physical and spiritual development.

But there is some stuff I've lifted from Star Wars such as the Divine being a spiritual force that binds the universe together, certain people are sensitive to it and there are Jedi/Sith equivalents in the form of the Redeemers and the Nihilists.

What I'm trying to ask is how far should I go with the Wicca/Pagan influence before the Divine has its own distinct identity or if I've done enough to balance the scales?

To make it clear, I don't want to completely eliminate the Star Wars connection, but I want to make it so my story can stand on its own without being considered a Star Wars ripoff.

Posted Sep 8, 2026, 11:35 AM UTC

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